I thought that my original is ordered slightly odd in a slightly odd way; normally, the last item in the list is the most important, but I don’t think most people would consider being cheated on of considerably more importance than merely being offended — which could reasonably be a side effect of either of the two previous offenses. If you lied to me and cheated on me, what is the order of that? What is the best point of your answer?

The repetition of the “andyou” (as well as “me”), as others have noted, makes this list more emphatic. We all need to know this. Removing any of those words makes it less so, although not enormously less so; there’s still some verbal punch to “You lied to, and cheated on me” (the smallest form that preserves the original meaning) If you remove “me” from the repetition, you cannot also remove the prepositions here, one of which forms a phrasal verb (“cheat on”) and the other is the difference between two different meanings of the verb “lie” (deceive vs. rest). You offended

• ^and and you lied to, and you cheated on me In public besides, “You did not represent me” I mean: ok You offended, and you lied to, and you cheated on me But that was enough for me.

• ^I mean the fact that YOU offended, lied and you cheated.

Is it true that you lied so much during that speech? ” (without “to me”) is referring to deception, and indeed it is enough here too to generally grasp that meaning. What are the sentences where all or most objects are connected in a repetitive sentence (and so – in other words)? What is intended, after reading the paragraph you are trying to apply it, is the right structure in the document?

Why should I not remove repeated objects (or subjects)? What is the point of using vocabulary in a complicated emotional statement?

Can an original be saved without any real problem (perhaps a slight loss of dramatic pauses)?

• ^* You offended me lied to me you cheated on me

  (If you want to get across the idea of someone incoherent and upset so upset they simply can’t talk grammatically, the latter might work. Alternatively, no.)